Re: simple, continued

Date: 2004-07-27 03:39 pm (UTC)
Oh wow. First: What a fantastic way to use the icon!

I loved this. It was frighteningly realistic, with nice little touches and moments that seemed so real I didn't question them at all.

I love your sentences madly. He had not known that it was possible to be dropped quite so hard, from a place so high, so quickly as Kirsten had dropped him. This one is beautiful because it seems so simply, yet it is so heartbreaking.

Jake wondered what kind of perfume Heath had tried on. Hell, yeah. It's a nice flow from the girls to Heath, and Jake's feelings and wishes.

I love the part with the "gaydar". Omg, I laughed out loud. Every single guy I went out with in high school turned out to be gay. And I never had a clue until after we'd broken up!" Makes me wonder about Jake's reaction. It's good that you haven't written one down though. <3

I love the last paragraph to pieces. I do. God, I do.

Thank you so so much! I really enjoyed it, and will treasure it. It's such a great story, it flows with so much ease and I want to read it again as soon as I have finished it.

<3
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